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The pie charts show the percentage of vehicle exports of one company in 1996, 2006 and 2016.

The three pie charts illustrated the proportion of transportation exports of one company between the years 1996, 2006, and 2016. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that the percentage of all three types of transport experienced an increasing trend in the surveyed years. Noticeably,
trucks
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 had the biggest percentage of all given period. In 1996, there was no doubt that the figure for
trucks
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 accounted for more than half at about 64% which was equal to 48000 traffic. The rate of motorbikes stood at 16%
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 the proportion of
cars
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 was significantly higher at 20% which was similar to 12000 and 14000 vehicles respectively. In 2006, the number increased considerably with car exports showing the fastest growth than other transport at 24000
cars
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 which were nearly double in quantity.
Trucks
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 still had the first rank at 53000 traffic
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cars
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 gradually grew to 18000
cars
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. Regarding the remaining chart, the figure for transportation continuing went up dramatically. The number of
trucks
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 exports still had the highest at 54000
trucks
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 which resembled 53%
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 the figure for motorbikes and
cars
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 was 22000 and 26000 vehicles in turn.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trucks, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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