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Many are of the opinion that the internet is inundating our children with dangerous information. There is however no doubt that the Internet represents great advances in communication. Discuss the pros and cons of the Internet.

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It must be accepted that as we move ahead into the twenty-first century, we have become more and more dependent on the most outstanding innovation of
information
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 technology - The
internet
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 or what is called the World Wide Web.
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admiration and
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, it
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 brings a few doubts and fears. Both, the positives
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 the drawbacks of the positives
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 the drawbacks of
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internet
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 usage are chronologically discussed. There are many advantages of having
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internet
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 access. The strongest reason is that it harbours a sea of
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 on amazingly innumerable topics.
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 network is extremely popular amongst all ages and classes of people because it is userfriendly, mobile easy
access
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 at flexitimes,
many
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 options to choose and the
information
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 can be retrieved in
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, audio, video or ppt forms. Perhaps, today, it is one of the best
tutor
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 because going online makes individuals indulge in
lot
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 of
self study
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 and passive learning.
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Internet
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 has made it possible to be present at any place at any time, virtually.
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 has made the concepts of video conferencing, online exa s,
reservations
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 possible. The communication is benefitted the most as its fastest and
cost effective
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. On the flip side, we must
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 not ignore the dangers
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 techo-web posts. The
principle
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 disadvantage is that surfing is so engaging and hypnotic that it not only wastes time and energy but
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 has been found to be extremely addictive. The other prime concern is
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the amount of and options of the uncensored material available.
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 is the most damaging effect in my opinion.
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, sites on making bombs,
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 lecturing that brainwash young people on terrorism, communalism and revenge are freely available.
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, the answers one gets a contradictory, controversial and many
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times confusing.
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 leads to more questions than answers. I believe the most remarkable damage is on the creativity of the human
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. Perhaps, because, the
internet
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 pampers a browser with so much
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 overload,
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it prevents him to explore
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his own opinions.
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, in the final analysis, it can be said that
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 there are a few "soft spots" of the
internet
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, I firmly believe that in the past few
years
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 it has been in rising popularity as it is
fastest
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the fastest
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,
reliable
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most reliable
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 and almost accurate.
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need
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this
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these
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 hours to link ourselves to
this
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 electronic web.

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