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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commerial perspectives.

#children #pressures #perspectives
Teenagers
are
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come across in large numbers
oppresion
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oppression
surrently
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currently
 from scientific, public and trade viewpoint.
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solve
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such
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.
Children
 donʼt
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school these days
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because
 they
afraid
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from
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 academic public and commercial pressures viewpoint.
This
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 pressures depose
fowerful
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powerful
 stress. Parents wish
own
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children
learn
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 at
the
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good schools and they give their exemplary schools.
Children
more
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 taught at
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school.
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 the
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children
not
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do not
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 surface hidden talent. From the social
side
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 they will be to master the global civilization but parents
to
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force
their
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them
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 to restrict
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themselves with
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with
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 tradition.
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them
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to
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appear
stress
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 and
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. The solution is difficult possible to
this
 issue. Mothers and fathers should be
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reletionship
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relationships
 to own
children
 in
this
 matter.
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 should be given
few
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freedom. The bottom line is
this
 teenager should not be subjected to the above pressures.
Otherwise
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children
to
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influence bad development physical and mental
this
 enforcement.
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