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Social media is becoming more and more trandy today, what are the advantages and disadvantages of using social media?

#media #trandy
It is indeed true that nowadays
people
 mostly kill their spare time on social
media
 as it is
best
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 resource
of
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 entertainment and Education as well .
Nonetheless
 , some
are
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become addicted and stay away from
the
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parents
 which is very hard to ignore . In
this
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i
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 shall explain the merits and demerits of
this
 trend. To commence with the first and foremost point
that
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 social
media
 is
best
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the best
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 way to
enhances
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 the knowledge of international and national news
while
 sitting at home .Needless to say ,
due to
advancement
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 of technology
people
 can upload every single news on their mobile phone with the help
to
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the internet
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internet
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 and by
this
people
 can stay alert and aware
about
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the
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current issues .
Moreover
 , in
this
 modern
ear
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,
people
 can earn
handsome
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a handsome
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 payout for
the
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social
media
 by
share
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 their talent videos on
instagram
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Instagram
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 and other social applications .
Depite
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Despite
 these benefits , there are ample drawbacks
of
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modren
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modern
 technology .
Firstly
 ,
people
are usually give
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 more preferences to watch and play video games rather than spending time with
parents
 and friends.
As a result
, the bond becomes weak and
children's
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children
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 usually stay away from their
parents
 . Meanwhile , children
loss
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 their social and communication
skill
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skills
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 as they busy
in
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with
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 social applications
platform
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platforms
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.
Apart from
this
 , when individuals become addicted
of
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this
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 things
then
 they normally forget to take their meals on time .
Consequencesly
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Consequently
Consequences
, they faced many health problems ,like obesity.
To conclude
,I would like to restate ,
although
 social
media
 is
best
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 way to earn money and get
chance
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a chance
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 to learn about other
nations
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nations'
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 news ,
however
 as
people
 become addicted and stay separate from
the
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parents
that is
 totally wrong for new generations
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