Social media is becoming more and more trandy today, what are the advantages and disadvantages of using social media?

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It is indeed true that nowadays
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mostly kill their spare time on social
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entertainment and Education as well .
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trend. To commence with the first and foremost point
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social
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way to
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the knowledge of international and national news
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advancement
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of technology
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can upload every single news on their mobile phone with the help
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internet
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and by
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people
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can stay alert and aware
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current issues .
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,
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can earn
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payout for
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social
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by
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their talent videos on
instagram
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Instagram
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and other social applications .
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Despite
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modern
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,
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more preferences to watch and play video games rather than spending time with
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and friends.
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, the bond becomes weak and
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usually stay away from their
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. Meanwhile , children
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their social and communication
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as they busy
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social applications
platform
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platforms
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.
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they normally forget to take their meals on time .
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, they faced many health problems ,like obesity.
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social
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way to earn money and get
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a chance
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to learn about other
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news ,
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as
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become addicted and stay separate from
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parents
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that is
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totally wrong for new generations
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