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People nowsday tend to have children in older age . Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

#people #nowsday #children #age
In recent
time
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,most
individual
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individuals
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 desire to have
youngster
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at
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in
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 golden years. There are
series
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 of
reason
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 that could lead to
this
 situation, which includes financial constraint in taking care of a family
while
 the
others
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 factors
is
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inability
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the inability
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 to woo a lady and psychological preparedness. From my observation , the demerit
outweigh
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 the merit .And
this
 relevant consequence will be
further
 explained in
this
 essay.
However
, marriage is an institution between a man and
woman
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 in order to have a baby.the issue of financial instability has
lead
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 many
into
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 delayed marriage ,most especially when the
economic
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 is not favourable in terms of providing job
opportunity
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 for the people is already a stumbling block to
such
phase
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 in life. In
constrast
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contrast
, difficulty to express
one self
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oneself
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 to a lady and emotionally
sets
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 for
this
 partnership are factors that are majorly the circumstances which lead to delay in having children. I once had a cousin
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that
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whom
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 we both have a dialogue , he gave me certain
requirement
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requirements
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 why is yet to settle down and prepare for kids,
is
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 response was
due to
 unemployment that the recession in the country is not friendly at all and he does not want any unborn neonate to suffer mercilessly without ensuring both physiological , safety and love and belonging needs are met
according to
 Abraham Maslow theory. In conclusion, having young ones at
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tender age is prudence
cause
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 you are able to grow and nurture them ,
there by
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 bringing them in the fear of the Lord and ascribing good morals ,escaping andropause and menopause which is a
health related
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 diagnosis. But the finance and wellbeing of the child should be the utmost priority to be considered.
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