People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

In recent times, people agree to give birth to their young ones when they have advanced in age.
Although
this
may provide them with the opportunities of acquiring a good education, befitting jobs, financial stability and mental soundness to care for the unborn
child
,it is not without some demerits. There are some medical
conditions
that may be complicated by late
pregnancy
and
besides
the woman is expected to attain menopause at a time in her life.
To begin
with,
ageing
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process is associated with westing and tearing of the body which predisposes the
body
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system to certain disease
conditions
.
Similarly
,
pregnancy
involves
both
physical and hormonal changes.
Conditions
like hypertension in older people are likely to be more serious with
pregnancy
resulting in preeclamptic toxaemia which can risk losing the mother,
child
or
both
during
pregnancy
, labour or delivery.
Furthermore
, the offspring can be born with congenital abnormality which may result from degenerative
conditions
in the
parents
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parent's
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genes.
For instance
,a couple got married in their early adulthood but decided not the have children until the lady was 40
years
. She was diagnosed to have
sever
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hypertension when she was of 38
years
.
However
, she became pregnant at 40
years
but died
due to
complications of hypertension. Notwithstanding, the idea of being psychologically and financially prepared to bear offspring is paramount. The parents should have
good
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income to provide basic amenities for their youths,
have
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good education without hurdles.
Both
parents should be mentally fit to care for their
offsprings
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.
For example
. A young lady graduated from the University,secured a
well paid
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job and bought a house on
mortgage
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. She saved enough money before accepting to get married . They
both
decided to have a
child
when she was 45
years
. She has the best medical attention and delivered a baby. The
child
had the best of his childhood, attended the best school and graduated from the University with
a
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distinction. He had everything he needed. In conclusion,it is important to
be give
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bring forth your young ones as an older adult after acquiring the mental and financial stability required to provide and nurture children.
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