Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Various people are of the opinion that
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should make arrangements of what
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children
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others are of the opinion that
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should be allowed to select what
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want to do with
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free
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both views will be discussed with relevant examples and a logical conclusion drawn. The decision of what
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leisure
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should involve both the
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being that the
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,
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choices for
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children
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would have the opportunity to learn more as
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would always get them involved with educative recreational activities.
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the tendency to acquire new knowledge is there too Definitely,the involvement of
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in making the right choice of what
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children
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is a picture of adult and
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play. The
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tend to learn activities,
games
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different from the ones
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do with
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mates.
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game which is educative would assist the
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spelling,
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and
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increase
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level of smartness.
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,the decision of
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age.When they are given
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to choose
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leisure activity, it would vary,some
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would select rough games
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the smart ones would go for the educative kind of games. Giving
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a chance to select
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free
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activity is
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a chance to help the
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in decision making. It would help the
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to be bold,calculated and
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it will help them in
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association with
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peer groups without having any form of inferiority complex. In conclusion,I opine that
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involvement in selecting a leisure activity for
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children
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is of great advantage and it gives them
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to learn more intellectually and increases the bonding between the
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and
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parents
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. And it is
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an avenue for
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to be more knowledgeable and acquainted with the
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of
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children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced development
  • expose children to
  • tailored activities
  • promote discipline
  • foster independence
  • genuine interests
  • free play
  • problem-solving skills
  • emotional well-being
  • unstructured time
  • personal exploration
  • structured activities
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