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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

#people #children #ages #outweigh
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Recently many
folks
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 decide to give
birth
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 in their old
age
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due to
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 financial independence and maturity to cope with the stress that comes with childbearing thou there is
infertility
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 and congenital abnormality which are common among older ones There are benefits that come with giving
birth
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 at old
age
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that is
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 more than disadvantages, I will expatiate on these in my upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples
To begin
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 with, older
people
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 are financially capable to cope with any financial challenges that come with childbearing without looking up to family for assistance unlike the young
folks
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, they give quality and adequate care needed for the children, more so they are physically,and emotionally rally and psychologically mature to cope with the stress that comes with childbearing, their reproductive system to is mature for childbearing, moving on older
folks
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 are mature enough to ensure discipline and training of their children
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 experience compared to younger ones.
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, in as much there are benefits of giving
birth
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 at an older
age
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, it comes with some challenges too, there is a high rate of
infertility
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 in older
folks
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due to
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 hormonal imbalance,
also
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 the level of congenital abnormality is common in
people
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 of older
folks
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 compare to young
folks
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 and secondary
infertility
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 is another issue with old
people
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 too. In conclusion,
people
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 give
birth
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 in old
age
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 because financial independence and maturity which are necessary for childbearing is lacking in younger
people
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while
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 the negative effects are
infertility
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, and congenital abnormalities which are not common in young
folks
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.
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