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The map shows Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map shows Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 map displays a shopping centre, Southside in its present form and the other, showcases its future renovations. There will be an expansion of the shopping complex
while
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 the golf course, the
park
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 and the fitness centre will be demolished. The planned developments
also
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 include a proposed addition of new
stores
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. Currently, the mall has just one entrance . Going forward, directly across the entryway, the Cafe can be found,
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then
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and then
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 ahead, is the play area. Adjacent to
this
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, is the Noodle shop and next to it,
is
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are
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 the Cinemas. Moving eastward from the door, the first
store
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 to encounter is the supermarket and the door after the supermarket leads to the restroom. The department
store
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 can be seen on the east side of the mall sharing boundaries with the Cinemas and the restroom. A car
park
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 is located outside the shopping complex
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 the next building houses the gym. The open field is where the Golf Course and
Park
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 are situated.
According to
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 the renovation plans, the shopping complex will be expanded occupying the open field
while
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 the golf club and
park
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 will be demolished. The car
park
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 will
also
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 be made bigger displacing the fitness center. Inside the mall itself, there will be new
stores
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such
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 as a beauty
store
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, two shoe
stores
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, a cosmetics
store
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, a gift shop and three fashion
stores
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 but the supermarket, the toilet and the entry will maintain their original location. The Cafe will be replaced with the info centre. The department will remain, increasing in size and acquiring its own gate.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, stores, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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