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Some people think that they can be fit by going to gym, while other think that there are other better way to remain fit. Discuss both the views with your opinion.

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In recent times,
gyms
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 have gained immense popularity amongst the youth and working folks. Many believe and credit
gyms
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 for their
fitness
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,
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, people are
also
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 of the opinion that there are various other methods to be healthy.
This
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point
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 of
views
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as well as
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 expresses my opinion. Numerous pupils find
gyms
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 convenient and rightly so, given that all the equipment they require is available in their proximity and they can receive guidance from the trainers whenever they need it.
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,
one
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 is likely to meet like-minded
poeple
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people
 at the
gym
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, who make workouts more enjoyable and turn out to be memorable friends.
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, the ambience of a
gym
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 has proven to motivate
gym
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-goers to be more consistent and push their exercise limits.
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, we must not fail to acknowledge the gross misinformation people are exposed to in
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 facilities, coercing them to take to harmful substances like steroids, which can do their bodies tremendous harm in the
long-term
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. At the same time, a research study has proven that
fitness
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 freaks, especially in
gyms
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, go through periods of eating disorders and experience body image issues. Looking at the distinct choices available
one
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 has to embark on their
fitness
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 journey; various peoples participate in sports, yoga or simply diet. Yoga is known to promote mindfulness
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 it teaches
one
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 flexibility,
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, it is a significantly growing interest. Many partake
sports
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 as it builds
one
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's tenacity and perseverance, and sometimes teamwork skills, alongside helping the person get fit. Uptaking these options is favourable to those who don't want to confine themselves to a closed space or can't afford
a
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gym fees
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gym
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 fees.
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 these options may not seem the obvious choice for a few in current times, they have been prevalent since time immemorial, sourcing their credibility. All in all, we are surrounded by a plethora of choices
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 our
fitness
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 journey,
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, it is essential to consider our individual circumstances and make a choice which tailors to our goals and needs the best. I personally would prefer participating in a sport like
badminton
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 or football to avoid the monotony of a
gym
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 and enrich my interpersonal skills.
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