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Many developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and service are more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Developing
countries
, in general, that have not achieved a significant degree of industrialization relative to populations, in most cases a medium to
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low standard of living so wealthy nations are supposed to give financial aid to poorer ones , others argue that practical
assitance
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assistance
 and service are more beneficial.
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views.
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, monetary help is said to be the most effective way to
assit
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assist
 developing nations for two reasons, the first salient point is that less wealthy
countries
 have seen fewer export orders, increasing food demand
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and
 fuel prices with high inflation in
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 mountainous or remote area where the news will report about
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 in public so
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foreign
countries
 do not know the exact place to give
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practical
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, money is the most straightforward way to assist them. The second point is many emergent
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 plans for solving difficulties by improving basic infrastructure but the only issue is
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scarcity
security
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 so financial support from external bodies to complete
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 projects and launch new
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 is important.
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, there are several reasons to believe that practical assistance and advice are what developing
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 because the donors will know exactly how the expenses can be used
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to avoid the
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corruptly
corruption
corrupt
. It has been observed money
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sanctioned
 by world agencies is not
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 purposes,
instead
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foreign
 nations can directly
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prioritize
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 investment to create temporary jobs,
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advice to support school
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 for
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 is vital.
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 it can be given
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 terms of providing human resources
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