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Neglegtion of science based subjects.Reasons and solution

In the
conteporary
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contemporary
 epoch the problem of
neglegting
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neglecting
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science based
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science-based
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subject
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subjects
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 in
university
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universities
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 increaseS*rapidly
severe
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severely
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 in numerous nations and countries.From my
staindpoint
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standpoint
 the main reason
of
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for
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this
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 is
low
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the low
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 income with which
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this
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these
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 faculties provide their
students
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 in the future,
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however
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 there are other crucial reasons for
this
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 phenomenon.In
this
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discourse
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i
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am to appraise the main reasons and negative
consequenses
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consequences
 of
this
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 phenomenon. On the one hand,it should be pointed out that,the
inqdequate
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inadequate
 salary and job instability are the main reasons which deter
students
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 from choosing
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science based
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science-based
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 studies.Meanwhile,the low level of
proffecional
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professional
 training of
students
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,in comparison with other
subject
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subjects
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 appearS* to be
other
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another
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 crucial reason,which
hold
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holds
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students
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 from opting
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science
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for science
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 studies.Recent research,conducted
from
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by
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Britain journalists
confirmS*that
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confirms that
job
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the job
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 market is *inundated with
science
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specialist
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specialists
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,who work in the ambience of severe rivalry.
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 year by year the
percent
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 of scientists who is *fired from
job
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their job
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 and living
hand to mouth
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hand-to-mouth
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 life
boom
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 with unprecedented speed.
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,
inadequate
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an inadequate
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 amount of
science
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 specialist in different sphere of
country
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the country
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entail
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entails
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 grave problems
such
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 as
:
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apply
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economical
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economic
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 collapse, obsolete methods of
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the country
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country
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country's
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 government and technological stagnation.All the mentioned problems expose
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the country
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country
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country's
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vulnerable
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to vulnerable
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before
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to
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 foreign
interventional
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 and crises.
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,if we turn to history,the countries
which
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apply
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(that)*lagged*behind the other countries always were *
target
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targets
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 of inventions.
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 all the mentioned data,it should be concludeD*that,unsatisfactory
salary
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salaries
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 and the lack of vacant placeless led to student preferences
of
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for
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 non-
science
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subject
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subjects
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,and
this
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 phenomenon
entailS*deplorable
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entails deplorable
 consequences for the state.

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