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Some children spend hours on their smartphones everyday. Why is this the case? Do you think his is a positive or negstive development.

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Nowadays some youngsters overuse
smartphones
 daily. The main reason behind it
is risen
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 demand
on
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 these devices
amoung
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among
the
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elder people that are role
model
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 for youngsters and
also
amount
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the amount
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if
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of
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intertainment
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entertainment
 that
smartphones
 contain.
This
 is
overall
 a negative
trend
 for
young
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 generation despite one single benefit that it may bring out. As life goes on
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very high speed in modern reality in order to
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ease
 and simplify most tasks
adulcents
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adults
adolescents
transfered
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transferred
transfer
 them to
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 smart devices.
Therefore
, on the tip of their
fingers
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 they have
acces
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access
 to e-libraries, online shopping, managing bank
account
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accounts
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 or even doing some
job
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jobs
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,
thus
 they are able to save time.
Subsequently
, as
children
 tend to copy
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 of their parents they start to have
enormous
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interst
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interest
 in using
smartphones
.
Then
, once they have access they discover a number of interesting apps that catch their attention and make them spend hours looking at
screen
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.
Additionally
, these programs are mostly built on level
complition
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completion
competition
 that gives juveniles
feeling
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 of challenge and victory once they finish it ,
therefore
 day by day they try to
achive
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achieve
 more ''success''. When it comes to
effect
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the effect
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 of
this
trend
 it may only be profitable if
children
 use
smartphones
 for educational or self-development purposes.
For instance
, during the global
pandemic
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children
 had to spend hours on devices, as it was
only
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 way to continue
education
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their education
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.
Moreover
, it is contended to be
adverse
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trend
, the major reason behind it are serious damages that are caused to all health system
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such
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drop
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of
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etc.Especially as
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 system of kids is not fully formed they are more likely to suffer.
Thus
, the
trend
 has
negative
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 impact
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socialization
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 of the
children
, since they are not used to
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 themselves in public. In conclusion, all mentioned information provides a concrete foundation that adults especially those who are parents should be reasonable role models for
younger
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the younger
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 generation.
Therefore
,even though
smartphones
 are used for educational purposes in some cases, their daily usage for hours may have undesirable effects on
childrens
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 health and social life.
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