The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
These 2 charts illustrate the
difference
of
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in
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proportion in each
part
of things that
was
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were
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bought online between 2005 and 2010. Each
part
is included with
electronics
&
appliances
, food & beverage,
home
furnishings
and
video
games
.
Overall
, it was noticeable that the amount of online sales in the food & beverage
part
in 2010 had significantly increased from 2005 about 10%
come
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along with
video
games
about 5%.
In
contrast
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the
number
in
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of
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home
furnishings
in 2010 decreased a lot compared to 2005 about 10%
moreover
electronics
&
appliances
which was the
part
that had
most
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the highest
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percentage in 2005
also
decreased
about
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by about
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5%
too
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apply
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. In 2005, we could tell that
electronics
&
appliances
had a huge
difference
in sales from the second and third about 10% and 13% respectively. In the
last
place, it was
video
games
that had the largest
difference
from the first about 17%. In 2010, there was a bit of
difference
between
number
one
that
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which
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was
home
furnishings
and
number
two
that
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which
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was
electronics
&
appliances
. It was only 2%. But there was some serious
difference
in
percentage
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the percentage
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of
number
3
that
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which
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was
video
games
and
number
4
that
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which
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was
home
furnishings
from
number
2
that
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apply
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was 9% and 17% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words difference, part, electronics, appliances, home, furnishings, video, games, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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