The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
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The two pie charts provide the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. The sales of each sector, electronics & appliances, food& beverage home furnishings, and video games, are shown in a total of 100
percent
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. As can be seen from the charts, electronics & appliances is the only sector that
hold
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more than one-fourth of the share in both 2005 and 2010.
Whereas
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the others shared up to 25% in 2005 and only food & beverage could make a significant rise by 2010. Food & beverage had made the biggest jump from 22% to 32% and took over the 1st spot in 2010. Followed by electronics & appliances which had lost 5% of its share and lost the top position. Video games had gained popularity from 18% to 23%
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home furnishings failed to maintain the 2nd place in 2005, by a dropping of 10%, and fell to the bottom at just 15% in 2010.
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