Table-The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

Table-The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
The table
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illustrates
how many English and Walesh
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employees
and factories engaged in the silk industry over
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half of the century from 1851.
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the amount of the labour force decreased
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throughout
the designated period, the number of
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facilities climbed. Meanwhile, there was
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tendency that more women contributed to
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field of industry than
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male counterpart.
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the data of factories,
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the starting figure was 272 in 1851, it surged to hit
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peak at 761 in the following decade before its dip by approximately 70 in 1871.
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, it eventually witnessed
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623.
On the other hand
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there were 130,750 workers for silk production in total in the initial year, which consisted of 76,786 female employees and 53,964 men,
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both figures declined and the total workforce had 100,000 workers less than its original in 1901.
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