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The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth
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The diagram describes the
water
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 cycle and its lasting motion on, above and below the surface of the planet Earth. We can see from the illustration is
water
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 passes through several changes of its form: evaporation, transferring of vapours by air flows, condensing, falling on the ground (in the form of rain, snow and etc.) and flowing
water
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 in spring, lakes and
ocean
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. First of all,
water
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 evaporates from
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ocean
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the ocean
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, which gives about 80% of
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overall
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the overall
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water
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 vapour in
air
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the air
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.
It
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Then
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then
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, the condensed
water
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 vapour becomes a cloud formation.
Then
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 after
cloud
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the cloud
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 is formated, it falls in the shape of
percipitation
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precipitation
 on the ground, lakes and picks. The liquid on the surface runs into the lake and
ocean
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 and some part penetrates into groundwater up to
impervious
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an impervious
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 layer and channels through
salt
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saltwater
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water
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 intrusion
to
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into
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ocean
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the ocean
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. In general,
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water
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the water
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 cycle involves many processes which are essential parts of nature as it supports all nature inhabitants and
ecosystem
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ecosystems
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 on the planet.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ocean with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
  • replenishing
  • infiltrates
  • atmosphere
  • vapor
  • liquid
  • cycle
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