Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. Which do you prefer-planning or not planning for youe leisure time?

certain
people
choose to not have any plans when they have their free
time
,
while
others
plan
their free
time
very carefully.
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essay will elaborate
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. Making plans for our activities during free
time
is a good thing, because we are going to know what should be done in our free
time
, and our free
time
will be more meaningful.
For instance
, some
people
make a program about working out in
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free
time
. with
this
program
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they will be healthier, or even better they got their goals like gaining a
six pack
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. So, planning is positive because it will be important for us.
On the other hand
, some groups prefer to not make any plans
while
having free
time
. it is not always bad
,
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when we do not have any
plan
.
However
, it is more relaxed without a
plan
, because, when
people
have a
plan
, they insist on doing it all in a certain
time
, but
in contrast
, without a
plan
people
do not have things that are obligatory, so they do what they want directly and finish it at that
time
.
For instance
,
people
who do not have a specific
plan
during
free
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time
want to
workout
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, so they just
workout
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at that
time
, unlike
people
who have a program that workout
everyday
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. So, without a
plan
, it is more relaxed, and
people
do not need a
plan
to have valuable
time
. In conclusion, I believe that a
plan
is a good thing and it is better to have it, but I would prefer to spend my leisure
time
without a
plan
and do whatever I want directly. So, even though having a
plan
is better, at least I got what I wanted, which is serenity, and a bit of
benefits
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from my free
time
.
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