The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.

The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.
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The given chart portrays the number of annual
water
usage
by different industries.
Overall
, an
industry
that uses the highest of
water
usage
(Groundwaterwater and public supply) is the chemical
industry
. The lowest
industry
that takes groundwater and public supplies for their
usage
are machinery, fuel, and textile
To begin
with, chemicals use groundwater as much as 430. The second rank is metal at 240.
Next,
the paper uses 190 groundwater, followed by food/drinks at 110. Textile will be next with 80 and
usage
of fuel
industry
is 70. The lowest
usage
is for machinery just 10.
Furthermore
, chemicals use public supply
water
as much as 240, which is the highest. Followed by food/drinks is 190. The machinery is the third of using public supply. Next is metal, take the
water
from public supply 90. Next is paper at 20 and for fuel, the paper takes 10 from the public supply.
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