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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #companies #industries #move #areas #centers
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well , it is
true
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 fact that individuals have to construct large buildings in the countryside
area
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if
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of
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urban
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the urban
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side
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 because in
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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 the free land is available at
low
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a low
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 cost as
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compare
compared
 to
town
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the town
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side
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 .
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,
due to
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high
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the high
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 rate of pollution , it is best for them to construct industries outside the
modren
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modern
 city .From my perspective, I believe that
merits
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 of
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 approach supersede
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its
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 demerits. The most
prominents
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prominent
 factor behind
this
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 phenomenon is nowadays
people
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 move
to
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from
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 regional areas to large urban
centers
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centres
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, as
the
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 result ,
the
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 large amount of land is free in
countryside
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the countryside
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 which can
people
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 and
government
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the government
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 used to construct
campanies
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campsites
.
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 , in these
areas
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,areas
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 the number of
tress
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trees
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are
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more
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apply
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which can help to maintain the ecosystem .
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 , if these industrial shifted villages
side
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then
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 unemployed
people
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 get chance
do
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job
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the job
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 over
their
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 and earn good payout from it . On the darker
side
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 , there are
few
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a few
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impediment
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impediments
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of
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to
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this
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 change as if the infrastructure move
in
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to
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 the small
area
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then
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people
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 in
cities
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 become unemployed and they
unable
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are unable
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 to get
chance
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a chance
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 to do
job
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jobs
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 in
cities
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 as industrial move
in
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to
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 rural
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area
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areas
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.
Moreover
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 , the production of products
are
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is
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also
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 reduced as
every thing
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everything
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 is available in
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cities
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the cities
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side
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 , so that the market rate
also
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 decreased dramatically.
To conclude
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,
although
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 it is
best
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the best
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 way to reduce pollution in
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 ,
however
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 some
people
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also
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loss
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lose
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 their job
their
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apply
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and
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unemployment
employment
umployment
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the umployment
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 rate
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 increase
on
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in
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cities
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