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The best way to deal with the rising problem of traffic and transportation is by encouraging people to live in cities rather than in suburbs and in the countryside. What are the effects of rapid population growth in the city? How can the quality of life of city dwellers be maintained?

#traffic #transportation #people #cities #suburbs #countryside #effects #population #growth #city #quality #life #dwellers
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Along with
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 the rapidly developing technology and a growing population, more and more problems
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 traffic and
transport
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 have been emerging.
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, some
people
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 assert that the best way to solve these issues is encouraging
people
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 to move to the countryside rather than live in the big
city
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.
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, too many populations in the
city
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 might cause some negative effects, so we should discuss it from both angles. Thanks to technology,
people
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 who live in urban areas could have a convenient life and
transport
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 as long as the
city
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 plans various public
transport
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systems
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such
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 as metro
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, buses, or subways. If the
city
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 have public
transport
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, the pollution of emissions would be reduced which could bring a significant advantage for the whole society.
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, even
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 population grow up consistently, public
transport
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systems
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 could help
people
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 become more effective and reduce commuting time.
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, if a number of
people
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 move to the
city
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while
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 the government do not establish a better public
transport
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 system, it might cause some drawbacks and
people
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 who live in the
city
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 would have a bad live quality.
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, traffic would be more congested
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 the density population,
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, parking would be difficult because there are not enough parking areas.
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, there are more extra payments for parking. In conclusion, I personally agree that with different kinds of public
transport
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systems
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,
people
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 could live in urban areas and enjoy
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better traffic conditions rather than the countryside.
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, it still depends on the real situations whether the government developing the public
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systems
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 good or bad.
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