Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many
governments
suggest that
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factor in all
countries
is economic
progress
, but some people do not find that other types
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not less important than
economic
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economics
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. I believe that economic
progress
play
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a main role in our lives. Economic
progress
can solve many
problem
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in
countries
.
Firstly
, it can upgrade conditions in all cities or villages.
For example
, some building is better than other,
can
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and can
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make better some flats to live in good conditions.
Secondly
, with economic
progress
easy to upgrade relationships with other
countries
.
For example
, some
countries
have bad
economy
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economies
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, but in some progresses they
better
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are better
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.
Governments
can help with
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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, but they need to ask to help
on
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other
progress
. On
other
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the other
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hand,
governments
can make better
other
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others
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of
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progress
and just change
experience
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the experience
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with other
countries
.
However
, most
countries
have
problem
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problems
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in
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economic
progress
, because it is hard to get good
progress
than in other types. In conclusion, I purpose that many
governments
is
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are
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right that economic
progress
is their most important goal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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