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Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it’s bad for them. Why? What are the most effective ways to improve people’s eating habits?

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Lots of
people
 are fond of consuming junk
food
 despite their awareness of its’s harmfulness. As far as I am concerned, there are several reasons for
this
 which are related to human psychology and his attitude to life. I believe, there are some successful strategies to change eating habits in a good way. First of all, the first cause of eating unhealthy
food
 is that it is one of the easiest ways to get endorphins going. Because of stressful situations in daily routine,
main
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 part of society
prefer
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 to eat
food
 full of empty calories in order to obtain dopamine hit.
For instance
, after
exhausting
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an exhausting
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 working
day
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days
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people
 are likely to cheer themselves up
food
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with food
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 like chips, chocolate, cookies or spicy
food
 which they enjoy ignoring its potential danger
for
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organism
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.
Also
, unhealthy
food
 may be a way to reward themselves after some achievement.
For example
,
certain
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a certain
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 part of society
go
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 to a restaurant to celebrate something with a glass of wine when they have had a victory in a certain area. I honestly believe that understanding the negative consequences of
bad
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 diet and
formation
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the formation
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 of
right
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 values can help to change eating habits.
People
 may replace junk
food
 with purchasing items and visiting beautiful places that make them feel better.
In addition
, literature about nutrition and psychology can help to eliminate the desire to spoil themselves with unhealthy
food
 and drinks.
Also
 visiting nutritionists and psychologists can be
efficient
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 way to solve
this
 problem. In conclusion,
although
 it is known that
wrong
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a wrong
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 diet can lead to undesired outcomes
people
 tend to follow it.
However
, thanks
for
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to
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 publications about healthy lifestyle and attendance highly qualified specialists can decrease the number of those who prefer
food
 that
lack
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 nutrients, vitamins and minerals.
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