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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Disscuss both views and give your opinion.

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A number of people advocate that all university students should study whatever they like and
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 who think they should study only important subjects. In my
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 I would like to tell you
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my opinion
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 topic. I guess, many students who study subjects they
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 of will find it easier to learn and less tired. And in future will do their job well. Indeed,no one like do what they do not like to do. I can
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 that from my
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 experience, recently my friend started studying for
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 that he does not like after he started skipping classes and resigned from it,
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 important in our life like doctors, policemen and scientists and
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 perform very necessary functions but not all people do
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 kind of work well because they do not find themselves in it. They make mistakes and kill their potential. In conclusion, it can be
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 that each person can choose what to do,
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 not choose
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a profession
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 that
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 do not like.
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