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Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it's bad for them. Why? What are the most effective ways to improve people's eating habits?

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Unhealthy
food
it
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is really bad for
people
,but they still eat that. Personally,I agree with
this
 statement to a maximum extent and my essay will elaborate on
this
 in the following paragraphs. In the first place,
people
 prefer tasty
food
than
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 healthy. Many doctors can explain
this
 that
people
 do not notice terrible effects from junk
food
. But
unfortunately
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 it is,that
people
 do not select enough vitamins for
development
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the development
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 of their body. Honestly,that kind of
food
do
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does
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 not benefit
people
,it has been proven by many studies. Another reason is that
people
 do not take care
for
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of
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 health. They do not understand that they must
to
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do exercises.
For
example
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 almost nobody
do
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does
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not
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want
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towant
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 keep fit,eat not delicious
food
 or refuse
of
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junk
food
. In conclusion,it can hardly be denied that
people
fond
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 of unhealthy
food
. Examples and proofs
are wrote
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 in my essay and I do not have any doubt that it is
truth
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true
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.
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