Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, almost everyone can afford to join the internet from any point in the world.
However
, not every source of data is the truth, there is much disinformation by which ordinary
people
can be misguided. No doubt that the power of control over informational recourse should be and depends on its spreading and influence on
people
.
Firstly
, there are many online forums, courses and conferences during which
person
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can catch wrong ideas or be deceived by following the pieces of advice that dominate there.
For instance
, in
Russia
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many poor or even rich
people
buy various guides in order to be on the lap of luxury. At
last
,
people
lose their invested finance, which
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between 1 thousand and several million rubles, time and sometimes even health and accommodation because of the loan on study.
Secondly
,
such
examples show the significance of informational regulation from the government. It can be implemented by installing some restrictions through internet providers, with legal responsibility for disobeying. To demonstrate, in China the external and internal web is filtered,
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messengers,
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platforms are banned or under control
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special structures.
Therefore
, it prevents misleading news and other provocative material from becoming popular. Taking everything into account,
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modern
time
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information around us will be
coming
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more and more available, bringing about the increasing probability
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misguided or deceived by fake news.
Nevertheless
, local authorities are to control and limit access to
the
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doubtful, risky data, thereby putting a stop
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misinformation
between
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citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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