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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050.

the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050.
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The data is shown as
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 chart , which compares (in
billions
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) the
population
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for
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 two Asian countries over 50 years period ending in 2050.
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, it can be clearly seen that
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while
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the number of individuals in China is in
fluctuating
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 during the given period. India’s
population
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 is in
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exponential growth
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 half a decade. In more
details
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, in 2000, the
population
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 of India was one billion and started to increase sharply reaching almost 1.45
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billions
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 in 2030 and outraced China.
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 the end of the period, it is predicted to hit
the
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 peak
1.6
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billions
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by the end of 2050.
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, China’s
population
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 was approximately 1.25
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billions
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 in 2000 and the number of citizens was increasing dramatically until the year
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2030 when the
population
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 was nearly 1.45
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billions
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 at its peak.
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, by 2030 the Chinese society began to decrease gradually and it is predicted to fall to 1.4
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 in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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