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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050

the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050
The data is shown as a line chart , which compares (in billions) the
population
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 of two Asian countries over 50 years period ending in 2050.
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of individuals in China is in fluctuates during the given period. India’s
population
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 is in exponential growth for over half a decade. In more detail, in 2000, the
population
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 of India was one
billion
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 and started to increase sharply reaching almost 1.45
billion
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 in 2030 and outraced China.
At the end
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 of the period, it is predicted to hit a peak of 1.6
billion
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 by the end of 2050.
However
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, China’s
population
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 was approximately 1.25
billion
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 in 2000 and the number of citizens was increasing dramatically until the year 2030 when the
population
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 was nearly 1.45
billion
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 at its peak.
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, by 2030 the Chinese society began to decrease gradually and it is predicted to fall to 1.4
billion
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 in 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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