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The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two pictures provide information about the student accommodation Centre now and in 2010. There were many differences that can be recognised between both plans.
Overall
,It is obvious that the garden area decreased dramatically using
this
 land to construct various facilities, including
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cars
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 park and bedrooms.
Also
, the number of bedrooms had increased. In 2010, there was a garden on the right side of the entrance now
this
 garden became a large car parking for students.
Furthermore
, an en-suite room was added by taking a small part of the hallway .
However
,the kitchen and the bathroom remained in their position with the same size. To accommodate large numbers of students college had to increase the bedrooms on account of green areas and living
rome
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room
. In conclusion, many changes had
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 to accommodation buildings to catch up with modern life demands from cars parking and suites room .
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