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The table beneath shows data on consumer spending for different things in the next five countries in 2002

The table beneath shows data on consumer spending for different things in the next five countries in 2002
The table beneath shows data on consumer spending for different things in the next five countries in 2002 There are total
5
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of 5
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countries - Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey. And
this
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tables
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table
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 describes spending
for
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on
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 food, drinks and tobacco, clothing and education The most costs in every
countries
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country
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 were for meals and tobacco,
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however
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 Turkey's consumers spent around
one third
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 (33%) of their money
for
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on
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 that items. The least
spend
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spent
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 was
for
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on
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 education, less than 5% in every mentioned country, but among
them
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 Spain's people were
least
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the least
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with
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at
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 1.98%. Between them are costs for clothing and footwear, in every country per
cents
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cent
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 higher than 5%, but less than
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 (10%), the most mentionable are Italy consumers with literally 9% and Sweden people, that has spent almost one of twentieth (5.40%)

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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