The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart provides the alteration of birth and death numbers in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the birth rates tend to fluctuate yet it is predicted to fall in the future.
While
,
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the death numbers are more likely to increase over the two centuries.
To begin
with, as can be seen in the figure,
the
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number of child
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child births
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childbirths
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tended to
rose
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signficantly
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significantly
from 1901 until
it
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they
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reached
its
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their
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peak in 1961. During
this
period, though there
were
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the
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downward
in
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every twenty years, the growth still rose
two
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peaks from around 20,000s to 65,000s newborns.
However
, the wave emerged in 1961
until
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it is predicted to decrease slowly from 2021 to 2101.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that
,
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the
death
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people
uplifted
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during
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from
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1901 to 2041.
Moreover
,
in
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from
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2021 to 2041, the mortality number
upsurge
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sharply to reach about 6000s and it end up to becomes steady
around
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at around
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60.000 after
then
.
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