The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart provides the alteration of birth and death numbers in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the birth rates tend to fluctuate yet it is predicted to fall in the future. While
,
the death numbers are more likely to increase over the two centuries.
Remove the comma
apply
To begin
with, as can be seen in the figure, the
Correct article usage
apply
Correct quantifier usage
number of child
child births
tended to Correct your spelling
childbirths
rose
Wrong verb form
rise
signficantly
from 1901 until Correct your spelling
significantly
it
reached Correct pronoun usage
they
its
peak in 1961. During Correct pronoun usage
their
this
period, though there were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
the
downward Correct article usage
a
in
every twenty years, the growth still rose Change preposition
apply
two
peaks from around 20,000s to 65,000s newborns. Change preposition
to two
However
, the wave emerged in 1961 until
it is predicted to decrease slowly from 2021 to 2101.
Correct word choice
and
On the other hand
, it is obvious that,
the Remove the comma
apply
death
people Replace the word
dead
uplifted
Add a missing verb
were uplifted
during
1901 to 2041. Change preposition
from
Moreover
, in
2021 to 2041, the mortality number Change preposition
from
upsurge
sharply to reach about 6000s and it end up to becomes steady Wrong verb form
upsurged
around
60.000 after Change preposition
at around
then
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