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The purpose of business is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge of experience.

#purpose #business #money
Basically, the goal of building a
business
 would be different for each entrepreneur
as well as
 the WHYs.
However
,
according to
 my personal perspective, I'm leaning toward
disagree
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 if we only focus to make
mony
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money
 in doing
business
.
First,
the money itself comes from the exchange
between
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of
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 one value
to
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for
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 another. We can pay it
trough
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through
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 action, service, or thing including money. That being said, the
business
 itself must be valuable so that will meet customer's willingness to pay, and bit by bit the
business
 will be profitable in the near future. To add to that, how
people
 define what
things
 are valuable when it comes to these 3
things
:
it
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helps us to do a job, as a pain reliever, or as a gain creator.
Otherwise
,
people
 would think the
business
 is not worth every penny.
Second,
business
 is
also
 about the
people
. Running a
business
 is definitely challenging to do alone,
hence
 the founders need to onboard more
people
 to help them achieve the
business
 goals which
also
 can be translated into money or profit. With that in mind, concentrating on the
people
, nurturing them, and treating them fairly and properly
are
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 part of the
fundemental
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fundamental
things
 in
business
, not only at the early stage
,
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 but
also
for
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in
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 the long run to make sure the
business
 can still
be exist
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exist
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for more years and sustain.
Last
, running a
business
also
require
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 a
system
. The
system
 will help the goal and the
people
 to stay on track or even grow bigger than ever. The
system
 can be a lever to scale up the
business
 if we know how to use it,
on the other
hand
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 it is
also
 potential that the
system
 becomes the bottleneck if
wa
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we
 can not tailor it wisely with other components.
To sum up
, we have 3
things
 that are essential in
business
, which are the goal, the
people
, and the
system
. Once we can manage them well, I believe the
business
 will be
last
.
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