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The line graph shows the global demand for different textile fibers between 1980 and 2015

The line graph shows the global demand for different textile fibers between 1980 and 2015
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The data is shown as a line chart which compares ( in
million
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 tons) various fiber
textile
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textiles
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 including:
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Polyster
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polyester
, Cotton,and
Wool
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 over 35 years ending in 2015 between 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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, it can be clearly
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seen that worldwide
demand
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 for
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polyster
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polymers
 is in exponential growth ,
on the other hand
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,
wool
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 production decreased gradually. In more detail, in 1980,
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polyster
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polyester
,
cellulosic
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 ,and
wool
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 production were almost 5
million
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 tons only compare to cotton which hold about 12 .
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cellulosic
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 and
wool
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demand
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were
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 constant during the first 20
year
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years
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.
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Polyster
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Polyester
 production jumped rapidly
in
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to more than double the
demand
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 to almost 32 by 2000. In 2000,
wool
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demand
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 outraced
cellulosic
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 and start to increase dramatically.
In
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 the end of the period ,
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polyster
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polyester
 needs reached approximately 70
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 to 1980 was more than 7 folds the
demand
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,
while
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 cotton and
cellulosic
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 almost hit 20 and 10
million
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 respectively .
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 , in 2015,
Wool
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demand
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 was less than 1
million
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 tons.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, polyster, wool, demand, cellulosic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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