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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

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Some
languages
 disappear gradually each year. Some
people
 agree that
this
 phenomenon is more advantageous because they can focus on learning a small number of
languages
. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the statement because
languages
 can be a cultural
identity
 of a country and
people
 can develop a higher mindset by learning different
languages
. With regard to cultural
identity
,
language
 is the lifeblood of culture and the core of
identity
. The impact that
languages
 disappear on individuals who live in countries with local
languages
 has clear disadvantages.
Firstly
,
language
 is
one
 of national cultures,
one
 way to distinguish each country is by their flag, their name, and
also
 their
language
. If the
languages
 disappear, it means the country lost
one
 of their cultures.
Secondly
, new generations in that nation should learn new
languages
 because their mother
language
 is dying out.
Furthermore
, since 1990, many countries in the world have claimed they lost their
language
 every year because of colonization, modernization, and immigration that happened in previous times.
On the other hand
, making everything easier is
also
 not effective all the time.
As a consequence
, the negative impact on the human brain will be
one
 of them. Our brain becomes less active and always tries to look for easier alternatives in any situation. Many individuals can continuously improve their critical thinking and tolerance when they are learning foreign
languages
. Oxford University has done research on
people
 who speak their traditional
language
 around the world and found 71% of indigenous
people
 are able to maintain their native
language
. They are happier and more fluent in communication. In conclusion,
although
 fewer
languages
 in the world disappear each year, it will be easier for a few individuals to communicate. I believe that the negative impacts,
such
 as
identity
 loss and slow brain development are greater than the positive effects.
Therefore
, it is our own responsibility to preserve our original
language
 for the future generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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