The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the
rate
of time cost in how the Australian parents add their children with dressing, homework, playing games, and preparing for bed. There are three colours to distinguish different representatives.
In all activities, mothers
did more effort than fathers
. For example
, in the aspect of dressing, mothers
help 75% of the whole in contrast
with fathers
rarely did it. The few difference between mothers
and fathers
was in playing games, in which fathers
reached a rate
of 5% but mothers
plunged to a low percentage of 25%.
There also
showed the percentage of both mothers
and fathers
. The highest rate
was 7o% in playing games with their children. In contrast
, the lowest rate
Was 38% in helping kids with homework.
In summary, mothers
usually help their kids in all activities but fathers
rarely did by themselves, they prefer worked with together with
their mothers
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