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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two pictures illustrate the proportion of time which was allocated by adults in a day to sleep, travel to
work
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,
work
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, relax at home, go out, and
other
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 in a nation in 1958 and 2008.
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, the highest percentage of
activities
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 in those years was working, and travelling to
work
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 was the least was the first picture and going out and other
activities
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 in the second one. Looking into the details, in 1958, having a job was the biggest number of
activities
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 at 33% followed by sleeping at 32%. It grew by 9% in the next 5 years
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 the rates of sleeping levelled off by 7%. Going out with friends or family was done at 19% of adults and it remained significant falling down to 6% in 2008. Both chilling at home and travelling to
work
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 increased moderately between those two years of 5% and 4% respectively.
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, the rates of other
activities
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 like doing hobbies or playing sports were unchanged either in 1958 or in 2008.

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