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The chart shows expenditures for five categories in three countries. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows expenditures for five categories in three countries. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the shares of expenditures for five categories in four
countries
Use synonyms
 in 2009. In all
countries
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, the chart shows a tendency to spend the most money
for
Change preposition
on
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 food, housing and transportation,
while
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 health care and clothing amount to a much lower quote. Housing is the top expenditure in
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 States,
where
Correct word choice
whereas
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 clothing is the lower one. In
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom and
Japan
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,Japan
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 housing and food represent the highest shares,
while
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 in Canada the highest percentages are related to housing and transportation. As for health care, whose percentage of expenditure is lower than 10 per cent in all four
countries
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, the
lowest
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the lowest
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 amount is spent in
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom and the highest in
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 States, with Canada and Japan showing the same level. In three
countries
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 out of four, the chart shows that people spend more money
for
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on
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 clothing than
for
Change preposition
on
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 health care.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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