The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The graph shows the rates of unemployment in
Japan
and the US between the
March 1993 and 1999.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, there was a big gap in the rate
between the two countries in
when started the study and Change preposition
apply
this
gap was completely bridged by the end of March 1999..
.
To start with Japan
, which had the lowest rate
of unemployment at just above 2% in 1993. This
number rose slightly and steadily to reach 4.7% by the end of the study
.
On the other hand
, the US rate
was as huge as 7% at the beginning and decreased sharply in March 1995 to 5.5%, then
figures started fluctuating for another three years.
Both the US and Japan
leveled
at a meeting point of Change the spelling
levelled
same
Change the article
the same
rate
of 4.2% in 1999.However
, by the end of the study, the US succeeded to target a better scores
of 4.2% compared to 4.7% for Fix the agreement mistake
score
Japan
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