The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar chart compares the amount of time spent by Australian parents supporting their children with 4 different obligations, in the year 2013.
Overall
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we can see that Mothers spent far more time on dressing and homework.
Whereas
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as a couple there was a greater amount of the schedule spent on playing games and preparing the children for bed. Fathers alone had significantly fewer clock hours spent on all 4 responsibilities compared to the mums. When looking at dressing and homework, we can visualise from the data that mothers spent 75% and 60% of the schedule respectively on those activities.
On the other hand
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, dads alone spent 10% or less on both tasks.
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, we can see that when working as a couple, there was 50% of the clock spent on dressing and just under 40% of the schedule on homework.
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, when analysing playing games and preparing for bed, we see that dads had far greater involvement
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the mums, with 70% and 50% respectively for both duties.
In contrast
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, we still see less than 10% involvement in paired responsibilities when fathers are working alone. Mothers
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had far less participation in these duties when working alone, with only 25% involvement in playing games, and just over 40% in preparing kids for bed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • time spent
  • Australian mothers
  • fathers
  • helping
  • children
  • activities
  • reading
  • homework
  • playing sports
  • general play
  • comparison
  • 2013
  • significantly
  • difference
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