The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 2004 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 2004 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the numbers of four different
kind
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of technology used in a U.S. city in a period of 10 years. At
a
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first sight,
Internet
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the Internet
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demonstrates the technology that improved the most,
also
considering that it started from zero back in 2004.
Internet
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The Internet
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has increased regularly year after year, overcoming all the other technologies and
therefore
reaching a figure twice, thrice or more than thrice higher than its competitors.
On the other hand
, broadcast seems to be almost disappeared, going from 100,000 to almost zero in the considered period. Regarding cable and satellite,
while
satellite has maintained a quite steady use, even rising a little
along
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the years, cable shows a fluctuating use.
Whereas
the number of households using it has risen up to 2009, its use has constantly dropped during the following five years, getting to the second to
last
position in 2014.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Households
  • Technology adoption
  • Growth rate
  • Decline rate
  • Milestones
  • Obsolete
  • Societal factors
  • Economic conditions
  • Advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Market saturation
  • Trend analysis
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