The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017.

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of three

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outlets in Vietnam in 2017 in

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million

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, the revenue of all brands fluctuated, and

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Hut got the least

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in that year. Looking into the details, The total revenue of The

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Company and Domino

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have similar rates at around 33

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million

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in the initial year, and there was a sharp decrease of 20

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in February. Afterwards, the sales of The

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company inclined smoothly to 28

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while

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Domino

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in May. Their

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varied until hit the peak in July at 41

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and 30

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respectively in July.

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the money that they collected levelled off on the next month and remained steady until November. Both of that brands grew slightly to around 30

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at the end

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of the year.

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Hut gained

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starting at 18

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and fell by 10

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in the next month.

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there was a slow rose until 16

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in June. Afterwards, the revenue decreased gradually and reached the lowest

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at 3

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in September. Until December, the profits they got oscillated to 4

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The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017.

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and families. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.