Some people Say history it is important while other not, describe both views

‏The
history
has been a topic of ongoing debate.
While
Supporters assert that
history
is not essential others feel the opposite. I will discuss both opinions in
this
essay. On one hand, it can be argued that what happened in ate previous decades can not help us in recent years.
Furthermore
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people in.
history
has
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a perspective that corresponds with that specific time.
Whereas today
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distinguish
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from the past because of the generation gap . As an example, Women in the ancient used to sacrifice their careers and dreams as well. That could lead to them
a
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feeling
of
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useless. which in turn has resulted in discrimination in our community.
On the contrary
, some people
argued
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that
history
is a significant aspect
in
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the modern world . Since we can learn enormously from grave mistakes . As
result
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, avoiding these mistakes or prohibiting them from going
further
.
In addition
, developing the discovery found by our ancestor makes life easy and help to evolution of the country on many levels.
for instance
, the world leader Mohammad bin Salman ,
prohibit
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all Wars in the country in order to,save the
civilslives
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lives
. Because in the past
as
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people
experience
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a lot of destroyed properties. All in all ,
while
they assert that
history
is useless Some individuals
believed
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in the importance of
history
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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