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Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages ​​of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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‏the government disbursement to save
languages
 from extinction has been a topic of ongoing debate.
while
 supporters assert their approval, others think it is a waste of the government budget . I will discuss both views
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 and explain why I agree with the former viewpoint . ‏on one hand , it is argued that some people think keeping these
languages
 from dying is really important for cultural diversity . Since other communities can learn and experience various
languages
.
Firstly
 people were born with different ‏to distinguish between their speak.
As a result
 , the
community
 will be more interested
to ‏explore
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 other cultures. ‏Many countries invest diversity of
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language
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 by publishing
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unknown
speaker
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 in mass media , which could lead to them having ‏avast profit and popularity around the world , which in turn resulted in ‏
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 the culture and
languages
 from dying out.
This
 is why it is very important to keep the speech. ‏
On the contrary
 , some
community
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 It is a waste of the institution's funding . Because ‏of
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 priority in spending money on responsibilities .
In addition
, saving
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 which ‏is rarely spoken
by
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 people can result in decreased
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 ‏budget
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power . If the big industry ‏focus only on the important aspect of
community
,
such
 as education and health service rather than expense money on an uncommon spoken accent
.
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For
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, a small village in India speak in language with only ‏18 letters , the Indian authority
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 them to learn the country's formal dialect and enter into society.
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 of money. All in all , many
society
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 think that it is a waste of ministry resources to save the unpopular dialect. In my ,opinion I do not agree , I think it is essential to save
languages
 from extinction and that should be done by the
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institution
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 culturally diverse.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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