In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Businesses in
this
modern’s era have a different
strategy
Fix the agreement mistake
strategies
show examples
to promote their
products
to the
customer
.
Although
businesses do some new techniques for their
products
to attract new
customer
Fix the agreement mistake
customers
show examples
, I think it is negative development since it makes the
products
to be lost
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
identity or image
from
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
product
To start with, most of the
company
want to gain a profit from selling their
products
. They
done
Add a missing verb
have done
show examples
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
many ways to get the
customer
, including advertisement and endorsement. Meanwhile, their techniques to approach
customer
Fix the agreement mistake
customers
show examples
,
sometimes
Add a missing verb
are sometimes
show examples
not always effective so
that
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
they have to think differently with the aim of their
products
to be known by
community
Add an article
the community
show examples
.
For example
, Indomie (
Indonesian
Correct article usage
an Indonesian
show examples
noodles brand) has a competitor
such
as Sedap. In order to beat the market of Sedap, Indomie has to innovate its
product
by collaborating with influencers intending to be aware of the
products
in society.
On the other hand
, the
product
which evolved with differing ways of commercial
get
Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
show examples
a chance to have
an
Correct article usage
the
show examples
attention
from
Change preposition
of
show examples
audience
Correct article usage
the audience
show examples
to know about the
product
.
In addition
, the
product
from
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
company
that
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
a different technique of original promotion sometimes
lose
Change the verb form
loses
show examples
its image from the
product
.
For instance
,
coca cola
Add a hyphen
coca-cola
show examples
is identic
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
Add an article
a bottle
the bottle
show examples
bottle
Fix the agreement mistake
bottles
show examples
,
while
in the past, the
company
once changed its drink from
bottle
Correct article usage
a bottle
show examples
to
can
Correct article usage
a can
show examples
and
resulting
Add an article
the resulting
show examples
loss of financial of
company
Add an article
the company
a company
show examples
due to
the
customer
preferred
Replace the word
preference
show examples
to buy the original one.
To sum up
, the new way of advertisement is developed by the
company
to attract the awareness of
customer
Fix the agreement mistake
customers
show examples
in an effort to gain
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
profit by selling their
products
. Meanwhile, the techniques sometimes do not
working
Change the verb form
work
show examples
out well as expected
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
planning,
such
as changing
bottle
Correct article usage
a bottle
show examples
of coca cola to a can.
Submitted by farel2300 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
What to do next:
Look at other essays: