Social Media has made it easy to be in touch with your friends and family. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Some authorities believe that sharing personal data
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internet
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can be dangerous and consider it as the primary drawback,
while
others think that social
media
it rather benefits
people
because it helps to be in connection with relatives and friends. I agree, that
advantages
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of social
media
outweigh its disadvantages as it can be useful in case of maintaining the link with other
people
and
therefore
be able to get help in dangerous situations and
expains
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explains
explain
why the main argument against social
media
, named scammers in digital space , is not valid.
To begin
, internet communication websites and
phone
apps provide
people
with
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the opportunity
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to be in touch with
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world and speak to
people
with no limits.
This
means that individuals do have
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to send messages and make
phone
calls
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any time they want
for
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ask some essential questions or
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,
instead
of waiting for time to discuss it face-to-face and even give an opportunity to express emotions online
my
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by
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using online stickers and gifs.
For example
, one of the largest corporations in the world Apple created small yellow faces called 'emojees' for their phones, which
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human feelings like happiness or sadness. Social
media
is
also
essential in case of hazardous situations
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when
people
need to be in touch with relatives or close friends. Sometimes
people
need to ask for help by
phone
call when their lives
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at risk and they,
therefore
messagers
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messages
can be a great option.
For instance
, when
person
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the person
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was kidnapped, they won't be able to make in
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call as it can lead to adverse ramifications in case
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will notice the
phone
. Other
people
inclined
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to believe, that there are a lot of liars on social
media
, which can steal your personal data easily with one push of a button.
However
, there is no reason to be afraid of it as nowadays huge companies are working hard to prevent those accidents and ensure users that they will be
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safe.
For instance
, Instagram helps
people
to make their passwords more complex to protect accounts and let
people
know whether it has some unusual activity. In conclusion,
this
essay claims that the advantages of social
media
websites are more valuable than
its
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disadvantages, because it benefits society with quick and easy connection with crucial
people
and
therefore
protect
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hazards.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized communication
  • fostered relationships
  • sense of belonging
  • heightened awareness
  • global issues
  • engaged
  • supportive community
  • privacy risks
  • data breaches
  • identity theft
  • mental health issues
  • anxiety and depression
  • fear of missing out (FOMO)
  • digital literacy
  • critical thinking
  • safeguard
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