You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with respect to some information about my city which is not true and I have just read
this
in a write-up in an international travel journal.
While
going through the write-up in the
magazine
, I noticed some reports about my
town
having bad roads, no power supply and not having spots for tourist attractions which are not true. Personally, I
visit
my
town
every three months and from my
last
visit
, I can confirm that all roads are tarred with no potholes even along the road that leads to the market.
Also
, electricity has been stable and in recent times, the government has built museums and developed several parks which tourists can
visit
and have a memorable experience. It is quintessential for the journal being an international travel
magazine
to give accurate reports about
this
town
because we have so many individuals who depend solely on information seen in the
magazine
to decide about the time. We
also
have individuals who will like to
visit
my
town
but are reluctant because of the information seen in the
magazine
. I would suggest that the
magazine
should send representatives to my city to get all facts and
then
release new articles to update people about the current situation in my city. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Seyi.
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