The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
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The line graph is an illustration of changes in the amount of
pizza
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,
fish
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and
chips
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and
hamburgers
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eaten by Australian adolescents on a yearly basis from a 25-year period from 1975 to 2000. Units are measured in
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times
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.   From an
overall
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perspective, it can be seen that the
consumption
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of
pizza
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was higher rather than
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two types of food in the first year of the graph,
whereas
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it was a dramatic drop which passed through the
consumption
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of
fish
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and
chips
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and
hamburgers
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. Both the least
times
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of
fish
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and
chips
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and
hamburgers
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rose sharply over the same time span.   From a detailed analysis, it is obvious that teenagers consumed
pizza
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more
times
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either
fish
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and
chips
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or
hamburgers
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in 1975. There was a dip in 1980
then
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it increased to nearly 100
times
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which was followed by a consistent drop to only 40  in 2000. The decreased
times
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of
pizza
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crossed the two consumptions of
fish
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and
chips
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and
hamburgers
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throughout the whole period.
In contrast
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,
the
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fish
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and
chips
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consumption
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yearly stood at about 10
times
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in 1975 rose dramatically and reached
at
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a peak of 80 in 1985. It kept increasing gradually to 100 in 2000.  
In addition
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, the
consumption
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of
hamburgers
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shows
the
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similar upward trends as that of
fish
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and
chips
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. The amount consumed started at about 10
times
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then
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it reached
at
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a high of over 80
times
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. After 1995, the
consumption
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of
hamburgers
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remained the same throughout the rest period.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish, chips, hamburgers, times, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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