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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the reason why
people
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 in Edmonton
use
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 their
cars
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 in the city and the pie chart explains what type of
transport
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people
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 prefer to
use
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 most of the time. Looking at the pie chart
first,
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it is clear that
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 the
car
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 is the most popular means of
transport
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 in
this
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 city. 45% of the
people
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 say that they prefer to commute by
car
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. The second most popular form of
transport
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 is the LRT,
while
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 busses and taxis are the main means of
transport
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 for the rest of the
people
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. The table gives more detailed information about why
people
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use
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 their
cars
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. Surprisingly, 55% of the
people
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 need to commute to work by
car
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.
Cars
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 are
also
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 used a lot for taking children to school or
business
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for business
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 purposes. Only 15% of drivers are doing their shopping and,
similarly
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, 15% need to travel by
car
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 for leisure.
Overall
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,
people
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 in Edmonton make good
use
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 of alternative methods of
transport
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 but there is a heavy dependence on
cars
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 for work.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, cars, transport, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transportation modes
  • car ownership
  • proportion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • transportation habits
  • environmental awareness
  • government policies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • environmental quality
  • future implications
  • adapt
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