The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Please try to write at least 150 words.

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The chart gives information on individuals sleeping routines in 5 jobs in Canada(students, truck drivers, full-time

mothers

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, business executives and doctors).

Overall

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, we can see that the students and the

mothers

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sleep the most

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the study shows that doctors sleep the lowest,

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in between we have truck drivers and business people who sleep an average amount of

hours

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. First of all, the napping time of a student shows continuous sleep of 8

hours

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at night which is a healthy routine, at the same time

mothers

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sleep 8

hours

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but in different intervals of the day. Compared to students and

mothers

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, doctors sleep only for 5

hours

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which is not sufficient for a human being. As we know that the average nap

hours

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required for a man is 7-8

hours

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we have business executives and truck drivers who sleep only 6

hours

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which is

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not up to the mark. A good sleep will give you a good day.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

160 words

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