Some Children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays technologies have been growing faster than ever in our history. From the product launch event of the first generation iPhone, revolutionary gadgets which

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many different functions

such

as conventional voice call and internet surfing have become astonishingly popular over the world. People began to connect with each other through social media applications like Twitter, Facebook or Instagram with their

smartphones

.

This

phenomenon not only can be observed in teenagers or adults but

also

in

children

. With

smartphones

,

children

no longer need to bring a heavy laptop in their backpack to do some individual activities like learning on the internet, watching movies, reading articles and playing high-demand 3D games.

Moreover

, some

children

also

use their

smartphones

to help them complete homework.

Accordingly

, there are many advantages coming from

this

new technology:

smartphones

that most

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children

on

this

planet can connect to other people more closely, learning on an online lesson in their home or

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with

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families or friends.

However

,

this

means

children

have relied on their

smartphones

and tend to spend

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time on them. Some official observations

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younger people start losing their ability for interacting with other

persons

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in reality, and being addicted to many kinds of games. Parents found that their

children

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difficulties focusing on their paper homework which is assigned by their teacher. In my

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the main reason

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this

condition is that most

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children

have not

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solid self-controling

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to avoid spending too much time on

smartphones

and

this

is

overall

a negative direction for growing

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children

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. The

parents

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have to figure out

a more refined and sophisticated approaches

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to educate their

childs

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children

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how to manage their

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for using

smartphones

.