The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two charts indicate the online
sales
for
retail
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the retail
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sector in New Zeeland in
years
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the years
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2003 and 2013. It is surprisingly interesting from
pie
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the pie
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charts that some retail sectors
such
as
sales
of
clothes
and
travel
tickets reduced from 2003 to 2013 on the
internet
. It is evident from the pie chart
travel
sector was over 1/3 part of online shopping in 2003.
Clothes
shopping was the second most preferred sector on the
internet
in terms of shopping. Online
sales
of music and films had almost
same
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percentage.
On the other hand
,
online
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sales
percentage of
travel
tickets slightly fell to 29% in 2013. Online
sales
of
clothes
also
decreased from 24% to 16% in comparison to 2003. Music and
films
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sales
were most preferred on the
internet
shopping.
Moreover
, the
sales
of music and films
were
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critically 12% increased on the
internet
in 2013. There was not any significant change between 2003 and 2013
on
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the
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book
sales
. From my point of view, something serious should
happened
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at
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online
travel
and
clothes
sales
like losing
trust
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the trust
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of people
to
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in
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online shopping in New Zeeland between
years
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the years
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2003-2013.
Otherwise
, online shopping was only increasing almost all over the world.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, clothes, travel, internet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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